Talk:FunlovingOmega's Alpha And Omega series/@comment-4834094-20110619000503/@comment-4027332-20110619014645

Hopes that example help you out on this. :) Another thing is that there should be some mystery or twist going on, like when Ryan tells them Lilly says he'll be a leader, change it to 'my mom' so it would make the reader guess who. :) It's a way to attract the reader to read more.